Since I haven’t seen any movie that the third panel could refer to, I shll content myself with pointing out that I THINK the grammar’s wrong in the narrative. But it’s early, I didn’t get enough sleep, and I cannas think straight enough to suggest a correction.
In the last panel “clash” might be a better fit than “bash”. It’s about bashing heads, but the way you’ve set up the sentence it’s the burglar’s head that does the bashing. It makes it sound like you’re looking to strap a hammer to the burglar’s head so he can bash stuff with his head.
That’s what I get for trying to be clever. Yeah, it reads a little weird. Maybe I’ll change it to: “I said I had no weapons with which to shoot, stab, or bash.”
Lose the “for”. It’s grammatically incorrect anyway, and the sentence will make more sense. You can move the “with which” around if you find it less awkward, but it’s pretty impossible to make it sound normal without losing the style of the original poem.
It IS a grammatically correct sentence, it just means something slightly different then what was intended. Instead of having nothing to bash the burglar’s head, he has nothing for the burglars head to do some bashing with.
You can’t just take out the “for”. No doubt you’re thinking about the sentence “I said I had nothing with which to bash the burglar’s head”. In that sentence “with which” refers to “nothing” and it makes sense.
However, you can’t just rearrange that to “I said I had nothing the burglar’s head with which to bash”. “With which” now refers to “the burglar’s head” instead of “nothing”, turning the whole sentence into gibberish.
If the intruders are exploding birds, the coat hanger will come in quite handy.
I’m surprised he went with the Mommy Dearest reference over the Birdemic reference.
Since I haven’t seen any movie that the third panel could refer to, I shll content myself with pointing out that I THINK the grammar’s wrong in the narrative. But it’s early, I didn’t get enough sleep, and I cannas think straight enough to suggest a correction.
I like the little “ting” in the sound effects in panel 1…
It’s really the “ting” that makes it art.
*LIKE*
It’s only missing the ‘wubble-wubble-wubble’ of a lid flopping to a stop.
In the last panel “clash” might be a better fit than “bash”. It’s about bashing heads, but the way you’ve set up the sentence it’s the burglar’s head that does the bashing. It makes it sound like you’re looking to strap a hammer to the burglar’s head so he can bash stuff with his head.
I would pay good money to watch someone do this.
Here you go:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=og6OygrtkXM#t=1669
It is from a funny German game show. Celebrities play ridiculous games. I like it a lot. Make sure to watch the 2nd team too! They are even funnier that the 1st 😀
Ok. Here you go. Here is all my money.
Woohooo I’m rich! I’m rich now, right? Please say yes…
That’s what I get for trying to be clever. Yeah, it reads a little weird. Maybe I’ll change it to: “I said I had no weapons with which to shoot, stab, or bash.”
Lose the “for”. It’s grammatically incorrect anyway, and the sentence will make more sense. You can move the “with which” around if you find it less awkward, but it’s pretty impossible to make it sound normal without losing the style of the original poem.
It IS a grammatically correct sentence, it just means something slightly different then what was intended. Instead of having nothing to bash the burglar’s head, he has nothing for the burglars head to do some bashing with.
You can’t just take out the “for”. No doubt you’re thinking about the sentence “I said I had nothing with which to bash the burglar’s head”. In that sentence “with which” refers to “nothing” and it makes sense.
However, you can’t just rearrange that to “I said I had nothing the burglar’s head with which to bash”. “With which” now refers to “the burglar’s head” instead of “nothing”, turning the whole sentence into gibberish.
Alright, the offending text has been removed and replaced with something that makes a bit more sense.
No wire hanger related burglaries!
A new holiday classic tale!!
eh… “classic holiday tale”. It’s still early.